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If you would like a formal critique on one of your pieces, please note :note: me. i would prefer it be poetry, as that would be most along the lines of something i am knowledgeable enough in to thoroughly critique, but i am open to at least attempting any and all styles of art.
A look at the man behind the man behind the run on sentences.

:bulletblack: How long have you been a member of DeviantArt, and for how long have you been writing?
4 years & I've been writing creatively since joining dA.

:bulletblack: Why did you become a writer? Is your reason to write the same now as it was then?
I was excited about the medium - there are many innate challenges to writing creatively and I was excited to explore them.

I'm slightly less bright-eyed these days;
I write to confront my personal reality.

:bulletblack: Do you compose haiku? Or are you a dabbler in six word stories? Share what type of literature is your go to when you put pen to paper & what literature you read here on dA.
I'm not talented enough yet to communicate so succinctly through my scrawlings, but maybe one day.

I write jaded free-verse mostly, but I'm much more practiced in putting my eraser to my paper than my pen.

I read a bit of everything. I consider myself quite fortunate to be in a number of positions that keeps me actively reading things I would otherwise never find.

:bulletblack: What, in your opinion, makes a good writer?
Understanding why you write and what you want to get out of it & setting reasonable goals that you regularly evaluate to make sure you're getting what you want out of writing. I have a similar stance on relationships, actually.

:bulletblack: Share a thumbnail of a literature piece you wrote, you're proud of, and briefly explain why.
I'm proud of every critique I've ever put together, both using the official dA feature, and otherwise.

Also, these are my three most favorite things I've read over the past year here on dA:
violet and violet.a spliff between my fingertips
(blue smoke in the morning),
kabul city this time.
i see them everywhere now.
i am back,
at an endless sea of rime
stretched and stained before me
on the pale concrete
in the weed turned gravel.
and i remember death
when i sat, sun-sunk but it's night
now, ex-breathing smoke
under the floods.
the sirens sounded
that night: incoming shells
i sat with strangers on a bench,
the alarms vomiting back
our end—
we witnessed explosions blooming
nearby, exchanged glances
in our flagged eyes
shrugged, a deep resolve:
we'd rather keep smoking than run
staring into the dirt,
expecting any moment
to hear the last sound.
progress reportthe astronauts never returned and neither did the news
in my hands i fold a megalithic pigeon
the take-home message is: the cosmos is a cold dead bitch
as you sleep under magazines, waiting for nothing.
in the shackles of a sterilized den, there's an actual
mastodon heart, pale and glassy pink, icy film
tightened like a fist;  - and the scientists despair:
   it's the morning of the opening,
then the few slashes of paralyzing waves.
like a sign we'd make when we were younger, a way to disarm
a bandit, or a preacher
                or the oncoming horde of space invaders.
but the drawings you sent to venus never returned,
 and now the crack,
          and the scientists at a loss before the angered public.
they release a report that states that the floodgates opened
        by themselves, that the valves erode
like the chalky sand that will swirl and hiss
       

Mature Content



:bulletblack: Share a thumbnail of a literature piece you wrote which you don't like and briefly explain why.
Things that I write that I'm not a fan of don't get posted, and usually get deleted from my notes.

That said, I tend to not be a fan of emotional appeals or cliche/generic writing unless it really takes me off guard.

:bulletblack: What are your literary goals?
Keep writing.

:bulletblack: Are you a member of any of DeviantArt's literature groups? Which are the ones you use most? Are they effective in helping your writing? Do they offer features, or contests, or prompts? Would you recommend any of these groups?
:iconthewrittenrevolution: -it's difficult to convey how hard the people there who aren't me work to help any and all levels of writers here on dA; they're amazing.

:bulletblack: Using six words, what advice would you give to new writers?
Break the norm presented to you, please.

:bulletblack: Who or what influences you as a writer?
My surroundings, music, a stray discarded beer bottle rolling slowly towards a gutter and realizing I'm looking into a mirror.

:bulletblack: Have any published poets, authors, or playwrights, living or dead, inspired you as a writer?
Yes, especially in my early days, but recently I deleted the uber app from my phone & try to walk everywhere.

:bulletblack: List five things about literature you love.
The Lit CVs here on dA, every interaction I have with writers and readers here on dA, the fact that the community is more receptive to coffee addictions and black wardrobes than the general public, & people sharing the burden of knowing that some words - while they might be close or even work - just aren't the right ones.

:bulletblack: List five things about literature you hate.
It's not an exclusive club, being a writer or into writing doesn't actually make you special or better than anyone else. Be open and receptive, not exclusionary or aloof.

:bulletblack: Are you happy with the state of the literature community?
I live in the district, my vote doesn't count.


As explained by NemoX7:

"Inspired by CRLiterature's latest journal What do you want to see from CRLit I decided out of sheer madness to draw up a questionnaire focusing on: what makes you a writer? Why do you write and where did you first have your a-ha! moment when a story or poem exploded into existence? Does it matter if you are a writer? Nope, this questionnaire is even for those who don't write, who loathe poetry, where the sight of a book causes the blood to drain from you. Here's your opportunity to share with others why.

:happybounce: To take part: 

Target Simply copy and paste these questions into a journal or as a new deviation with the title of "The DeviantArt Writers Questionnaire 2015"

Target Type in your answers to the best of your ability and submit.

Target Include The DeviantArt Writers Questionnaire 2015 (Original journal) as a link in your description either by a thumbnail or as a link.

Target Leave a comment on The DeviantArt Writers Questionnaire 2015 (Original journal) with a link to your answers.

On December 24th I will collect some of the answers and make a compilation feature journal. I am a dummy! 

Thank you for taking part! La la la la"

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Carmalain7
Alain Mower
United States
Hey All!

I'm a happy-go-lucky kid who spends all of his money on music - the darkest & most esoteric he can find, with occasional piercing rays of sunshine - who constantly feels at ends with his interests and the societies they place him in, & who doesn't really feel like he truly belongs anywhere, but is super happy to be right here.

:iconthewrittenrevolution: :icongetdailydeviations: :icontalentedwritersguild: ::iconlitrecognition:
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Officially moved a couple times the last month, and will be again in another few months, but I'm both in Atlanta & have a pulse metronoming me along to the ebbs & flows of corporeal existence.

I'll be more present after the next move, been working on some things in the meantime, but no foreseeable finish as of yet - editing phase.

Let me know if you're in Atlanta & want to grab coffee.

Also, let me know if you're betwixt the firmament and the core of our little floating island in space & went to grab coffee - I'm up for Skype coffee convos.

Cheers lasses and laddies - hope people loquaciously raided the larder while I was away.

:iconbowplz:
With love & respect,
Alain
An eye for an eye, and a mouth full of gold teeth.
“Holy Sons is about facing your personal reality. You can’t wear it, it’s not cool, so it’s not a commodity in this culture. I don’t think it’s built to succeed in any way."

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similar-singularity Featured By Owner Mar 7, 2016
i miss you :rose:
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Carmalain7 Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2016
I miss you, too.

What should we do for less missing?
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VioletVeronika Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2016  Hobbyist Photographer
Hi there! :wave:
Welcome in  :iconmacropoetry:  a group which gathers both, photographers capturing the 'macro-world' and poetry writers of various kinds.
We are much happy to have You on board! :nod:
Here are some things for You to get started in the Group:
First journal!Hello everyone!
Thank you to all of you for being part of this brand new group:MacroPoetry :heart:
And of course, don't hesitate to submit your work to our group and show us what you got :eager:
Here are the rules:
:bulletgreen: To be part of our group, you must send us a request. Two "Yes" votes are needed to join us. Two "Yes" votes are also needed for your deviation to be added in the gallery. If your work is declined, we can give you an explanation, but only if you ask nicely :aww:
:bulletgreen: In order to be accepted as a member, there must be macrophotography and/or poetry in your gallery before you send us a request so that we can vote appropriately
:bulletgreen: 2 deviations per day (this rule may change later)
:bulletgreen: macrophotography and poetry only
:bulletgreen: please submit your best work. The photographs with the dA watermark are not accepted
:bulletgreen: no photomanipulation
:bulletgreen: visual poetry is accepted
[Bullet; Green] no racist/violen

We hope You'll enjoy being here, maybe even find inspiration in the works of Our members :)
Speaking of art... there is a contest going on!
Contest, everyone!Ladies and Gentlemen, the time has come for a new contest!

Theme: "A Drop's life"

Beginning of the contest: March, 1s, UTC 
Deadline: April, 1st, UTC

But let's clarify a couple of things first


- You have to be a member of MacroPoetry 
- Your deviation has to abide by the general rules of MacroPoetry
- You can submit up to 3 deviations
- Your piece has to be a new one. In other words, it has to be done AFTER the beginning of this contest
- Submit your deviations to the folder "A Drop's Life Contest"
- You have to add in the description of your deviation that it's for the "Drop's Life Contest" and add the link to this journal
For the poets:
- English

It's a perfect opportunity to gain some points...get more exposure... and receive feedback from other artists!
We can't wait to see Your works! :la:
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Dec 6, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Your profile needs more hugs. Which I originally wrote as gus. Apparently it needs Gus, too. 

Let me hug you! Yato and Hiyori (Snuggy) [V1] Hug Attack Hug Smurf-hug Sherlock - Hug 
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Jade-Pandora Featured By Owner Edited Oct 24, 2015
 Anna squee  Alain!  Stopping by for a random Jadey squeee... just because! Hope all is going well in your place recently relocated to there in DC.
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Carmalain7 Featured By Owner Oct 26, 2015
Thank you for the squee and well-wishings, Jade, and for bringing the overwhelming positivity aura that follows you everywhere to my wall. :thanks:
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Jade-Pandora Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2015
Hatsune Miku-06 (Smile) Why thank you, and it's always a pleasure.
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clalepa Featured By Owner Sep 14, 2015  Professional Photographer
Thanks for fav .)

I have extended my gallery on FB and I would be very glad if you visit me. here you have the link!

www.facebook.com/clalepa

Thanks and regards from Spain!

C
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
:hug: Thank you!
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Carmalain7 Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2015
Oh no, what did I do this time?

Does this have something to do with this pewter chalice full of unmeltable ice I woke up with this morning? I legit have no idea how it got here.
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LiliWrites Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Gremlins.
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Carmalain7 Featured By Owner Sep 4, 2015
the buggers, always trying to frame me in an effort to usurp my position as the count duke of peanut butter. :shakefish:
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BloodshotInk Featured By Owner Aug 17, 2015

Hey! :rose:


I wanted to drop by personally to say thanks for joining TheWritePlace! I’m excited that people seem enthusiastic about it :giggle: If you wanna know more about our group check out Our Rules (there aren’t many and they’re all mostly common sense to me!) or just ask! If you fancy getting more involved we do have positions open which you can find out about here. For now I hope you enjoy the group and find it helpful. If you have ideas on how to make it more useful, suggestions, feedback, anything, just let us know - and when our chatroom #TheWriteRoom officially launches (soon) I hope to see you in there too :love:

- Kate :heart:


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Iago-de-Xibalba Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2015  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for the watch! I really appreciate it.
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Carmalain7 Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2015
And I appreciate well written poetic narratives, so everyone's winning, good sir. :salute:
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